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The Quite kid
Ya I know him
he sits there in the corner
listening to weird music
I used to make fun of him
I Don't any more, I swear I don't

The Quite kid
He just sits there drawing
what, I dont know
Just go and look
See for yourself

The Quite kid
At lunch he sit alone
at that table all by himeself
Eating a sandwitch
and reading a book
About vampires

The Quite kid
says he writes poetry
He says it quiet good
With a sense of deep emotion
I just laugh and say
"poetry is for pussies"

The Quite kid
In gym class
So scrawny in his shorts
his skin so pale
white like milk
I say "go outside and get a tan you little freak"

The Quite kid
Sees Me trip and fall
in the hall way
And as I get up
I am staring at 7 inches of gunmetal
in the Quite kids hand.

The Quite kid
for the first time I hear his voice
"all I wanted was alittle credit,
All i wanted was to be accepted,
For who I am,
And not who you want me to be"
:iconmasterofphantasy:
This Is my best work... I think... AND iam the quite kid... we all are
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:iconalexandzann:
I loved it, kind of weird I can relate to the kid so much, except for the gun part, I had that settled out before it went too far. Nice to see someone write about it and make it known to the public.
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:iconmasterofphantasy:
well i think everyone wh o is outcast in high school gets those kind of thoughts. but i hardly think 200 readers is "the public"
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:iconalexandzann:
True, it may not be the public, but it's still better then keeping it hidden out of sight forever.
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:iconmasterofphantasy:
well i was actually pretty pissed when i wrote this.

i wrote a sequel poem for this too.
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:icondavsimon:
I suppose I should have read the first installation before part 2, because it really sets the context for the whole drama. However both poems are strong enough to stand on thier own. The only little issue I saw was you wrote: "quiet good" and I'm fairly certain you meant "quite good"
If you are the quiet kid, I hope that you find a way to deal with your demons...other than murdering your tomentors. I am by no means a writing or poetry expert but if there is a way to "polish" or punch up the sentance structure, it would really help to completely draw the reader into the "Quiet Kid's" world. Overall, it is still an excellent work.
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:iconmasterofphantasy:
this poem was meant to show the hassleing and bullying of others and to show that we all just want to be accepted by others.
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:iconmajindreams:
Spelling errors abound, but otherwise, a truly excellent poem. The ending is unexpected and very powerful and the poem is well written and well phrased.
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:iconmasterofphantasy:
ya I know about the spelling errors... I liked the ending myself... thank you, now to check out your gallery...
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:iconmajindreams:
Are you implying I didn't like the ending? Because I loved the ending. o_o
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:iconmasterofphantasy:
no. i was agreeing with you... sorry about that.
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